Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Individuals
believe that everyone should take measures in protecting the
environment
for the many generations to come. I agree
to
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with

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this
statement for there would be lesser
pollution
, and it is the responsibility of every single human being. Day by day, there is an increasing rate of carbon footprint an individual produces and it contributes to
pollution
wherein it is the biggest contributor
of
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to

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global warming. To save the planet,
people
should start minimizing their carbon footprint. By
practicing
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practising

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this
, there would be less trash produced. The
less
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fewer

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trash humans produce, the less
pollution
the
environment
suffers.
For instance
, research has shown that when
people
started using some mobile applications that
monitors
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monitor

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one’s carbon footprint, they started to get conscious of how they should limit their waste, and it was shown that it helped by 4%.
Furthermore
, protecting the
environment
is a moral responsibility. The planet is home to human beings, and taking care of it is part of their job in living within it. Similar to
people
having homes, they maintain their houses and make
it
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them

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clean as they should be. By moral obligation,
individuals
should abide in treating the
environment
with tender loving care.
For example
, some
individuals
and families have reduced their consumption of meat, have reused their water, and have commuted
instead
of riding their own vehicle.
Research
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The research

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suggested that the more
people
do these practices, waste reduction might increase up to 10%. In conclusion,
individuals
should take steps in protecting the
environment
presently for the younger generations for it is a moral obligation.
Moreover
, it benefits the current generation and the ones that are yet to come in terms of reducing
pollution
.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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