Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People believe that
the
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international
news
should be involved as a
school
subject
, while others think that it may affect other valuable
school
time. It is a tendency to believe that many schools provide an effective course
to
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their children, particularly in academic subjects.
However
,
the
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global information should be concerned by teachers to enhance the children perspective as well. According to
this
point of view, providing international
news
as the
subject
in schools can provide many benefits to
students
.
For example
, widely their perspective of variant cultures around the world, gain more knowledge about economic and
society
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development and keep them up to date on the current situation.
On the other hand
,
the
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international
news
might be too complicated for young children to understand. It would be better to encourage
then
with
imaginary
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the imaginary
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story rather than
realistic
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a realistic
the realistic

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story. Some people believe that
the
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international
news
as
a
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the

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main
subject
in
school
might waste the other valuable
subject
because it is not relative in the career path.
For instance
, most
of
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professional
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the professional

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careers are required skills for academic knowledge.
This
is why the
students
should spend more time on it rather than the global
news
. In conclusion, there are several benefits and drawbacks to
put
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putting

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the
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apply

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international
news
as a
subject
in
school
. In my opinion, I believe that
the
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apply

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global information should be provided to
students
. It can be considered as
the
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apply

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additional subjects rather than the main one.
Moreover
, it should be considered the age of
students
to study
this
subject
as well. The high
school
students
are mainly
focused
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onfocused

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. They will gain more critical thinking about
the
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society living
also
wider their perspective in life.
This
will
prepared
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be prepared
prepare

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them ready to challenge their future lives.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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