Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

A growing number of people prefer to have self-run
businesses
instead
of working for others.
This
might be because they can receive all net profits made by their company and
also
they do not to be dictated.
However
, unless the company made
profit
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a profit

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,
they
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even cannot make money. Many young adults tend to run their own
businesses
since they think it can help them to achieve their ambitious goals which
is
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are

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earning more. By running their own
businesses
, all net profits are earned by them.
In other words
, when a
compay
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company

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make money, its manager
receive
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receives

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total
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the total
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amount of earnings which have left after paying the staff’s salaries.
In addition
, another reason why people prefer being self-employed is
because
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that

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they prefer to work with their own rules.
For instance
,wearing uniforms and having solid working hours is not appealing to them.
In
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the other hand,having
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self-run
self run

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selfrun
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business has might have some drawbacks.
Firstly
,running companies needs a great deal of discipline as
manegers
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managers

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have to meet deadlines. To clarify more, company owners should work hard and carry out most of the main tasks on time and on their own ,which are not only demanding but
also
need lots of punctuality.
Furthermore
, it is possible for companies not to earn profit depending on situations. In
such
situations,managers are deprived of having
stable
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income which might result in their inability to make ends meet. In conclusion, the growth in the number of
businesses
is due to its possible advantages,
such
as making more profit m.
However
,having
self-run
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a self-run

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bussiness
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business

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needs
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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responsibilities and
also
there
is
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some threats about lacking money.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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