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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

#years #professionals #doctors #engineers #countries #jobs
In the current
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 most of the
well educated
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professionals
 like doctors,engineers leave
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 which are paying less salary and they move to foreign nations for better pay.
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disscuss
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 about major problems which forced them to make these decision and the solution to resolve these issue. Well trained professional leave
these nation
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 mainly because of there less pay which they obtaining from there respective companies.They
also
 very much
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 about the rules laid by the government.These sort of issue are caused mainly because of the pay given by there companies.on highly trained
professionals
 leaving these country affects the government in
there
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gdp
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GDP
,it
also
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 to depend upon other countries in order to lead their life. The possible solutions to retain skilled professional is that on providing them
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a
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better pay and increasing there annual bonus.There is a chance
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retaing
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retaining
retain
 these talented
professionals
.
Government
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 should
also
 provide lots of infrastructure to these individuals.on retaining these our motherland can see a significant increase in there GDP.
The economic
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 growth can
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significant growth.on practising these methods future generation can get inspired by these and they
also
 opt to stay in the country. These
professionals
 have a valid point on leaving
there
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 own land for a better life which
are
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 provided in developed nations.So if we give credit to there skills there is a high possibility
on
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 changing their
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 and they will happily stay in these native and they will surely contribute a lot to there society.
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