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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
In
this
 modern era, most of the things we are seeing around us are the precious gift of science to humans. In every field of
society
such
 as doctors, engineers, teachers , all are dependent on each other for one or the other need. According to my point of view, I strongly believe that inventors, who gave their day and night to discover new inventions, is
also
 an essential part of
society
. To support my views , unfolding some key facts related to the statement.
To begin
 with, doctors are a very important part of our
society
 but, they
also
 depend on some medical machines to treat patients,
for example
, the smallest but widely used invention Thermometer. Inventors are the ones, who made it possible and easy to use by their hard work. To illustrate it
further
 , the whole world is suffering from "COVID19" since
last
 year. Fortunately, after waiting a long time, the scientist was able to develop the vaccine to fight
this
 virus. Their dedication and hard work to save the
people
 made it possible.
However
, they didn't stop yet, scientists are still continuously working to achieve more accurate vaccine.
Furthermore
, In the older days, due to lack of education,
people
 were going through a lot of problems
such
 as electricity, illness and transportation.
However
, Today, all the equipment that makes our
life
 comfortable like television, fridge, automatic cars are the result of
people
, who were recognizing difficulties in our
life
 and worked towards them.
In addition
 to
this
 ,
still
Add a comma
,still
show examples
 they are working from down to dusk to provide us with a more comfortable
life
. To put it in a nuts shell, inventions couldn't be possible without inventors. Even though some
people
 consider it or not but they are the key part of our
society
 as doctors. we should be thankful for their efforts to make our
life
 comfortable and safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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