IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter -remind your employer what the course was about -explain why the course was useful to you in your work -suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear Mr. Lee, I am writing to provide feedback on the first aid program I attended
last
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 week. The course covered a wide range of essential procedures during medical emergencies, and the instructor arranged a lot of practical exercises like CPR and AED operations for the participants to familiarize those techniques.
Furthermore
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, we have learned how to provide psychological support for the casualties and their family members. From my point of view,
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 training is extremely helpful for my daily duties as our airlines carry a huge number of passengers and frontline staff are required to handle various critical situations. I now feel equipped to identify different illnesses and provide support with the latest safety protocol.
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, I have more confidence in reassuring injured or sick travellers when they have emotional needs.
On the other hand
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,
while
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 the training is based on hands-on and scenario-based practices, I'm not convinced it would be as beneficial for some of our office-based colleagues
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 different working environments.
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, the ambulance service always arrives at the scene in an emergency.
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, focusing too much on procedures and passenger handling is unnecessary compared to the in-flight situation.
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, I am grateful to have had the opportunity to join the program. Please let me know if you have other questions. Yours sincerely, Philp

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task achievement
Try to expand on why the course is not suitable for office-based colleagues with more specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more connecting words or phrases to enhance the flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone is very professional and polite, appropriate for a letter to an employer.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a single clear idea, improving readability.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-executed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • “I am writing to provide feedback on…”
  • “The training course titled ‘(Course Name)’…”
  • “The main objectives of the course included…”
  • “One of the significant techniques/methodologies covered was…”
  • “This course has been particularly useful for me because…”
  • “I have already started implementing…”
  • “As a result of the training, I have noticed improvements in…”
  • “However, I believe this course may not be suitable for all colleagues because…”
  • “Some roles do not require…”
  • “The course assumes a level of expertise in…”
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