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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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There is a general thought on
few
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people
 to have a particular
day
 in a month called
as
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car-free
-
day
.On
these
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this day
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day
 they do not want any public to use their private
vechicles
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vehicles
.
Lets
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Let's
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 discuss the merits and demerits
about
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of
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 having a
car-free
day
.
Firstly
lets
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let's
let us
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 talk about the
postives
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positives
positive
 on having a
car-free
day
.If the rule is
intiated
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initiated
 we can witness a change in oxygen level in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
people
 will not face any sort of sound pollutions on
these
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this day
these days
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day
.The pollution emitted by
these
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this vechicle
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vechicle
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vehicle
vehicles
 will not be there.Animals will
fell
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feel
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 free and they get a chance to roam
in
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on
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 the roads without any sort of fear.
People
 can spend
a
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quality time together with there family on
these
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this day
these days
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day
.
For example
france
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France
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 on declaring
car-free
-
day
 they witnessed that
pure
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the pure
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 oxygen level in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 has increased.
Secondly
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 if we think about negative aspects
on
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 declaring
car-free
-
day
.Many
multi national
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multinational
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 companies will get affected as
there
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their
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 employes could not able to reach
there
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their
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 companies.There will be lots of crowd in public
transport
,
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Since public
transport
 is the only means of
transport
.If
a individuals
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individuals
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deceide
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decide
 to travel it will be so difficult for them since only public transports are the only mode of
transport
. There are plenty of merits and demerits on ordering a
car-free
day
.on placing a
car-free
day
polluition
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pollution
 are controlled to a greater
extend
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extent
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on
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 the other hand,many
people
 face these has
crisis
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a crisis
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 on travelling.
Government
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The government
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 should weigh all the pros and cons.Based upon those they should decide.
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