Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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have pros and cons so
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things
things
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in a good manner or in a bad manner . so
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both advantages and disadvantages of
advertisement
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world.
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talk about t the advantages so when we see the
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this
helps us to know about
things
and helps us how to
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this
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and how
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work so
this
is
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way to learn
abut
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new products.
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example
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we see the
advertisement
of
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any washing machine they show us that machine is good for that loads we
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the time period like 60 minutes . so from
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we make guess that its good for us like a small family and they buy that machine rather
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get
wrong
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one. so we all know that there
is
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are

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some disadvantages of
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like when there is any new phones
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a
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market they show
price
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if phones quality and youngsters try to get new phones . they bother there mom dad to get
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phone some of the middle family
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have that much money to buy expensive
things
and they take some wrong steps to get that . they
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go away from there studies and
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at
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last
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just wanna say that always tries
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postive
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positive

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which is helpful for us . And make our life easier and always get
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update
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updated

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with new
tecknowledgy
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acknowledge

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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