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For some people learning in a group is the most effective way.while other prefer one one-on-one instruction .disscusn both view .what is your opinion ?

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Recently, a whole slew of
people
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 has been deciding to work as self-
employeds
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employed
employees
 rather than working for companies.
This
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 essay will discuss what might be the main reason for
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 phenomenon and will,
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, explain what are the drawbacks that could emerge when working as a self-employed person.
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 with, society has changed a lot throughout the years and, nowadays, part of the population is more concerned about the balance
bewteen
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between
 their job routine and their personal lives.
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, having a self-employed career can allow
people
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 to decide their own schedule and organize their days without the necessity of asking for permission.
For instance
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, I have a friend who works as a sales representative. He can manage his own responsibilities and I, constantly, see him taking the
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Friday
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 off to relax and relieve the stress of the week.
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, being able to develop a self-employed career might have its negative effects. Companies usually offer some benefits,
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 as health insurance,
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 for sick leaving and paid annual vacations.
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, losing those benefits might increase the cost of living for those who cannot afford those extra expenses. To illustrate that situation, I have been working in Apple Company since the beginning of the pandemic.
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 during
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 period I got covid-19 and had to leave my working responsibilities for fifteen days, I still earned my weekly payment.
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, if I were a self-employed person I would not be able to maintain myself during
this
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 period. To conclude, nowadays,
people
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 tend to look more carefully for the balance between their lives and their working routine.
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 concernment might be the main reason for
people
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 choosing to pursue a self-employed career.
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, deciding not to work for some company can make
people
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 increase the likelihood of dealing with some
undesireable
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undesirable
 or costly situations,
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 as not earning any money when ill or having to afford
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health insurance for their own.

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