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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are those who have the belief that nations should be able to produce their own
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 to feed their people and reduce imports. I totally agree with
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 an idea because it would develop the local economy and result in higher
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food
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. The main reason why I believe individuals should be fed by
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 produced in their own countries is that they would be stimulating the internal market. While some think
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 important to import
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 from other places because it provides a wider variety of options, what it actually does, in my opinion, is to inject money into other economies
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 of investing in the local one, difficulting its development. Governments should prioritize their citizens and make sure they have opportunities to thrive
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 of investing in
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 producers around the world. Another reason is that the
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 would be of better
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. Even though there are rigid international protocols to guarantee the
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 of products involved in trades between different countries, it is unpracticable to be sure that every good
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 imported was safely produced or transported.
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, it is way easier to control the
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 of production and transportation inside the country that the
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 is going to be consumed, resulting in a better
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 of the
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 for the population. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that countries should reduce their
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 imports and produce the
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 necessary to feed their citizens because it would stimulate their internal economy and provide better
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 for the consumers.
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