IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The best way to solve the world‘s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world‘s #price #fuel
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is irrefutable that, rise in environmental pollution become a hot topic to discuss. Some ethnic group are with the verdict that the government should raise the charge of smoke like petrol and diesel.
This
Linking Words
 issue is quite controversial, but I am partially agreeing with
this
Linking Words
 statement. In my essay, I intend the delve into the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. On one hand, motor vehicle exhaust waste plays a major role in creating climate pollution. People who intended to buy the motor vehicle would ruminate them at least once,
moreover
Linking Words
, individuals would really deliberate going unnecessarily out into their vehicles, according to the ministry of transport survey in India, after increasing the ammunition value had turned into 40 per cent less traffic than usual in
last
Linking Words
 year.
However
Linking Words
, increasing the price of vapour would control the world’s habitat to some extent.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, those who have strata position in the society would still have the personal vehicle of their own.
Instead
Linking Words
 of creating the surroundings cleaner, the sales of automobiles would be divesting and have a large impact on the economy of the nation. As
such
Linking Words
, the growing automobiles industry holds almost 30 per cent shares of the wealth of any nation. there is no meaning in increasing vapour figure to the affluent of society and their economy. We all know that forbidden fruits are always sweater and rising the vapour amount would not be an efficient method to control the ongoing scenario of the world’s habitat.
Instead
Linking Words
 of that, the government should articulate the concern and influence the automobiles industries to manufacture the solar-vehicles or electrical vehicles to support the ecosystem.
Submitted by sachinjaat224 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: