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Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. In what ways are computers a hindrance? What is your opinion?

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When it comes to
computers
, there are pros and cons especially as more and more
people
 spend time using
computers
 as time goes by.
However
, in my book, it seems that there are more benefits than drawbacks.
First
 of all, I can't deny that there are harmful results from using
computers
. One of them is
people
's physical condition can be affected in negative ways. To illustrate, unfortunately, most
people
 use a computer with bad posture
such
 as bending their backbone inappropriately.
As a result
, they end up visiting doctors to get some treatment, which is time-consuming. Another drawback is
people
's personal
information
 can be spread to random unknown
people
 whose intention is not desirable. What I mean is that on the Internet, there exist hackers who are aiming at other's private
information
such
 as passwords, bank account numbers and phone numbers to use stealing their money. Even though some public sites try to protect their member's
information
, some genius hackers can be out of their league, which means sites and the members can be in a danger.
However
,
obviously
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 there are some advantages to
computers
 as well. One of them is
computers
 can make
people
's life more comfortable and convenient. To specify more, using a supercomputer, by predicting the future weather, local dwellers can prepare for their daily routine in a more efficient way.
Furthermore
,
this
 kind of
information
 would be helped greatly for those who are managing their farm.
On the other hand
,
computers
 provide loads of opportunities that
people
 can meet at the same time using the Internet.
For example
, especially these days many
people
 can't meet in real life due to the pandemic situation.
However
, using online meeting sites or apps
such
 as Zoom or Skype, we don't have to worry about any virus situation.
As a result
,
people
 can meet each other or attend a class or work meeting. It is unimaginable if there is no computer or no Internet. In conclusion, since the advantages of
computers
 outweigh the disadvantages,
people
 should not say that
computers
 are useless.
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