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Some people think that it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them.  Other people believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #it’s #friends
When we have a concern during our life, we usually ask our friends some advice no matter it is serious or light.
Then
, we could be able to face two different types of
people
. On the one hand, there are some
people
 who like a person who always
agree
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 with them or has
a
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 same opinion. The
people
 who have
this
 kind of personality would not like to have an argument with other
people
.
Thus
, if we have a friend who has
same
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 thought with us, that might be a lot
more
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easier to have a conversation and share our idea.
On the other hand
, there are
the
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people
 who like to have a friend who has an
opposit
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 opinion from them. Because, when you talk about a topic like
a political issues
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political issues
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, you would be able to get an idea from
the
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 different point of view and it might help you to understand the situation. Of
course
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 when you have a conversation about sensitive subjects, it might cause an argument.
However
, if it is not
a
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serious talking, you could refresh your self. In my opinion, I would like to stay in the middle. Because
,
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 we need both kinds of
people
 to live our life. I personally like to share my concern with my friends and ask them
an advice
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advice
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. So if I have friends who agree or disagree with me, I can hear both side of perspectives and It will help me to make a decision.
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