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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Marriage has been an integral part of human's
life
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 for ages, and the reason behind marrying someone is different for each individual.
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, there have been disagreements between
love
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 and financial status being the main aim to marry a person. I personally think that
love
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 is above every materialistic thing, and
one
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 should marry for
love
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 despite thinking about
money
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, but
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 essay would discuss both sides of the matter. On the
one
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 side, people require emotional support to live a happy
life
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, which a loving partner can provide. Today, everyone is more career-oriented and financially stable,
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 they do not need another person to depend on for
money
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.
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, they need someone to care about them,
love
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 them unconditionally forever, which can not be bought with
money
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.
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give
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 a person the quality of
life
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money
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 can be earned anytime. On the other side, the
money
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 perspective of marriage can ease
one
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's
life
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 by eradicating struggle and hard work from it. These marriages allow
one
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 partner to enjoy luxurious lifestyles without working hard for
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them
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.
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, the Indian parents always choose a well earning male with a high bank balance to arrange the marriage of their daughter,
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 these girls always stay home and rely on their husband's income for lifelong. In conclusion, it can be said that,
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 choosing a partner according to wealth can help to avoid hard work for a good lifestyle, yet
money
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 brings temporary happiness and
love
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 is a permanent treasure for a happily ever after.
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