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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
Food
 has always been a very important topic
world wide
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. Some
contries
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countries
 produce a lot
,
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 and have enough
food
 production, but others have
lack
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of
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food
 for their population. The
circunstances
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circumstances
 varies
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 each
contry
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country
 of the world. Location and climate,
for
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 are a very important matter on the capacity of
produce
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 or not
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a certain
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 type of
food
; there are
contries
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countries
 like Canada, Sweeden or Russia that maybe are limited in what they can cultivate in their very cold weather and
contries
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countries
such
 as Japan or Mexico in a more hot climate that maybe alouds more agricultural life.
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hand
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 we can not speak about "
Food
" without taking into consideration the economy
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 each
contry
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country
. Some have the power and
indumentary
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rudimentary
necesary
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necessary
 to
procude
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produce
 their
food
 and even more, like the United States, Italy, France or Germany, just to mention a few; but others
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coun'
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count
can't
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t
 even with the basic need to
fullfill
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fulfil
this
 request,
such
 as many
contries
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countries
 in
africa
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 or India, to mention a few. I can'
t
 agree
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 any of the statements, because of what I expose before I
belive
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believe
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 that even when each
contry
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country
 produce what they need, there will always be some that
doesn'
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 have any or enough and
needs
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 to import from abroad.
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