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Some people believe that young people know about international pop and movie stars but know very less about famous people from the history of their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from history?

#people #pop #movie #stars #history #country #interest #gain
In the current day world, kids grow up to
listneing
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listening
 music and watching movies on television or phone
moreover
 they try to copy their lifestyle and
hence
 in doing so they remember their name by following them on daily basis.
Firstly
, my essay will talk about the various reason why people remember celebrities and ignore
history
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the history
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 of their own country.
Secondly
, what can be done to create more interest among them.
To begin
 with, when
history
 is taught in school, people look forward to it as
mere
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a mere
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 subject where scoring passing grades is enough whereas the same student
show
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shows
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 more interest in what they see and hear on the phone & social media where
history
 is never talked about.
For example
, Trips arranged by the schools and colleges are often to Disneyland or some fun commercial space but not
on
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 a historical place where kids can learn more about the past.
On the contrary
, to create more interest teachers should take
intiative
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initiative
 where
history
 is taught in
more
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a more
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 meaningful way by introducing various
activites
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activities
 in the class itself.
Picinics
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Picnics
 can be planned on
heritage
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a heritage
the heritage
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 site where students are asked to prepare presentations. Every now and
then
 screenings of famous videos and movies relating
old
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 narratives can be shown.
For example
, Fresher are asked to enact the play on war stories where
every one
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everyone
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 has to play
certain
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a certain
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 character.
Such
 things will not only enlighten about old records but will
also
 serve as
memory
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a memory
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 of
lifetime
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a lifetime
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. To conclude, due to lack of exposure
indiviuals
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individuals
individual
 have lost their track in Ancient records but it can be controlled when institutions are ready to invent the new zeal regarding
chronical
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chronicle
 days.
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