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Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

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Most of the funds from the
government
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 are spent on art which they thought it will boost the quality of the lives of many individuals.
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, they should spend it on other things. I agree with
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 notion, the officials should spend more on social welfare, education and health benefits of the society. In my views, art is important in every country to promote culture and talents but the
government
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 must focus on the most essential things; the
people
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.
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 with, governments must provide good education and health insurance for their
people
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 since that
money
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 is coming from the taxpayers.
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,
instead
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 of giving so much funding to the gallery or museum, the
money
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 should spend on the hospital equipment and benefits of the employee. So that they can be more efficient in their work and can provide better service to the
people
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.
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, officials must take control and spend more
money
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 on these things than focusing on art.
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, we will not neglect that preserving our culture is
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 important. The
government
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 should put some of the budgets on it but
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 is not the priority. We can support our local artist and talents by buying our own products.
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, foreign artist promotes their works in our country and we tend to buy it and neglect our fellow citizens.
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, they are locals, the officials will give some of the
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 to support their work and promote it to their own place. In conclusion, spending
money
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 is fine as long as it is used in a proper way, artist need
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 support to preserve and promote our culture and
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 the
government
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 will focus on the social welfare of its
people
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.
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