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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 whether teachers or
parents
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 contribute more to
children
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 intelligent and social development. I strongly believe that parental factors greatly decide the intelligence and behaviour of a
child
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. Genetics is one of the key components to determine intelligence. Some human biological features are inherited from generation to generation by genetic systems, so
children
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 are likely to have several similarities with their
parents
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.
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 who is born into
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 family with artistic tradition seems to be more creative and better at art than other
children
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. Another well-known example is
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 royal family. George W. Bush is the 43rd president of
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 State and his father was
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 the leader of
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 House.
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, in terms of genetics, smart
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 may have smart
parents
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.
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 why people say “like father, like son.”
Parents
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 are the very
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 teachers. These days, education is conducted sooner than in the past, starting when a mother gets pregnant.
Parents
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 talk or read poems to their to-be-born
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, and let him listen to music every day. Some researches show that
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early childhood education plays an important role in
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’s cognitive and social development. In
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 stage, a
child
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 spends most of the time staying with his
parents
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 and imitating them. They become the
first
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 people to teach a
child
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 certain morals and social skills.
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, the way the
child
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 is brought up
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shapes
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 their personality. In conclusion, the intelligent and social development of
children
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 is influenced mostly by their
parents
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 because of genetic elements and
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early education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundational role
  • structured influence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • appetite for learning
  • curriculum
  • learning styles
  • socialize
  • cooperate
  • navigate social norms
  • underestimated
  • role models
  • confined
  • academic year
  • life lessons
  • formative years
  • moral and behavioral development
  • supportive home environment
  • reinforcing
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