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The culture of different places are now looking similar in modern times. What do you think are the causes of this? Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

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In the present era, the
culture
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 of different regions
are
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 becoming
same
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. The major reason behind
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 is
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the connection
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 of the world with technology. I personally believe
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 is a positive trend because harmony among
people
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 is increasing.
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,
people
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 from all around the world are connected with each other on social media. They share their thoughts, ideas and lifestyle. They often get influence
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 each other's thoughts. Gradually, they start adapting these in their life.
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 eventually
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 to
similarity
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the similarity
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 in
culture
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.
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, a recent survey state that most
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people
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 accepted that they change their lifestyle after getting influenced
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 social media.
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, the indispensable factor causing
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culture
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 all the around is
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 of technology.
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, cultural differences cause differences among nations;
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, with the same,
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this
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 will be reduced. The peace among the nations will be maintained.
People
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 from different places are able to understand each other well. The clash of thoughts and opinions will be reduced.
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,
people
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 from one country can easily travel and shift to other countries because of similarity in
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.
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, a recent article printed in an English newspaper stated that international peace has increased due to the cultural differences
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 reduced globally.
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, similar cultures help to build the gap between the nations. In conclusion,
culture
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 all around the world is becoming similar because
people
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 are in-touch on social media. I consider
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 a positive trend because
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 is helping in maintaining global peace and making the universe a better place to live on.
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