The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity ?

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in poverty, food shortage and loss of employment due to
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population.
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the various
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that mankind is facing and
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inflicted
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. Currently in the modern world, one of the biggest
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humanity is facing is
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food shortage and
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than the land available. More and more farming lands are being converted
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Other important problems like poverty and loss of employment go hand in hand where for one empty position
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are more than 1000 applicants
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who can work harder and faster than old experience person and guess what they come at
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cheap price to the institution.
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Reliance listed the job opening for the position of Director on Linked in, it was seen that more than 25000 candidates applied for it.
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that has contributed most in the increase of the citizens are the lack of education and Climate change. There is
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of floods and massive rainfall which has directly affected
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leaving in the rural areas where they depend upon agriculture production for their lively hood and when
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theirs get affected they migrate to cities looking for work.
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of individuals in
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dont
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get proper schooling and are deprived of family planning
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knowledge
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human would consist of 5 to 6
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where he can barely meet the ends. To conclude,
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public is
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threat faced by
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every nation in
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and which has resulted in numerous other problems and
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completely agree with the above statement.
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