The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity ?
To begin
with, throughtout
the world there is Correct your spelling
throughout
rise
in poverty, food shortage and loss of employment due to Add an article
a rise
the rise
ever increasing
Add a hyphen
ever-increasing
of
population. Change preposition
apply
Thus
, I completely agree with the above statement and Firstly
, my essay will talk
the various Verify preposition usage
abouttalk
problem
that mankind is facing and Secondly
, the causes which has
inflicted Change the verb form
have
this
huge problem
.
Currently in the modern world, one of the biggest problem
humanity is facing is of
food shortage and Change preposition
apply
this
is because there are more people
than the land available. More and more farming lands are being converted in
buildings and structures to create Change preposition
into
habitat
for the Correct article usage
a habitat
people
to live.
Other important problems like poverty and loss of employment go hand in hand where for one empty position Change preposition
in.
their
are more than 1000 applicants Replace the word
there
moreover
, nowadays companies are hiring young people
who can work harder and faster than old experience person and guess what they come at very
cheap price to the institution. Add an article
a very
For example
, In Mumbai when the
Reliance listed the job opening for the position of Director on Linked in, it was seen that more than 25000 candidates applied for it.
Correct article usage
apply
On the contrary
, two major problem
that has contributed most in the increase of the citizens are the lack of education and Climate change. There is Change to a plural noun
problems
increase
seen in Correct article usage
an increase
number
of floods and massive rainfall which has directly affected Change the article
a number
the number
to
the Change preposition
apply
people
leaving in the rural areas where they depend upon agriculture production for their lively hood and when employment
Add an article
the employment
of
theirs get affected they migrate to cities looking for work. Change preposition
apply
Other
thing is Change the wording
Another
lot
of individuals in Change the article
a lot
village
Add an article
the village
a village
dont
get proper schooling and are deprived of family planning Correct your spelling
don't
knowldege
. Correct your spelling
knowledge
For example
, Nuclear
family of Correct article usage
the Nuclear
Correct article usage
a country
country side
human would consist of 5 to 6 Correct your spelling
countryside
people
where he can barely meet the ends.
To conclude, rising
public is Add an article
the rising
major
threat faced by Add an article
a major
the
every nation in Remove the article
apply
globe
and which has resulted in numerous other problems and Add an article
the globe
hence
i
completely agree with the above statement.Change the capitalization
I
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