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Some people belive that allowing childeren to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of indivituals who only think about their own wishes.others believe that that is important for childeren to make desicions about matters that effect them. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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These pie charts illustrate the proportions of the intake of nutrition in terms of a typical citizen's meals in the United States of America. The information is given about the three components,
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 as sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. Overall, it was evident that dinner and snack time more likely contained the three types of unpleasant nutritions, while breakfast had the lowest percentages for all three nutrients. Interestingly, the ratio of sodium and saturated fat ended
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. An dinner time, people consumed the highest proportion of both elements at 43% in sodium and 37% in saturated fat, followed by at lunch 29% and 26% respectively.
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, as for Added sugar, snacks and sweets that people eat between meals contained over 40% of all. Meanwhile, breakfast meals contained only under 16% of each nutritions in all results.
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