Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In the modern world, most of the youngster admires and follows to
celebrities
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like media sports starts them, who are not acting good role models. I strongly believe that
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is a negative development.
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, Media and sports stars have some negative
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. A lot of young people follow all their
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. Young adults who are not mature enough to judge, what is suitable for them in their society and coping with their bad
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such
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as drinking, smoking, and drug use and youth feeling that it is appropriate to do the same. The experiment all these
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in their
life
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and affecting their behaviour and health.
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, young adults spending a lot of time following, what their idols are doing or where they are going.
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may be distracting them from their study and work and a lot of disturbing in their
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and not able to get achieve their
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aim.
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, some
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are creating standards of beauty.
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, more young people are feeling fewer confidantes and dissatisfied with their looks. They follow their idols' beauty standards and changes in their
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physically, mentally, and emotionally. As some
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are becoming tinnier and their fans
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coping with them and stop eating, reducing their weight, and getting stressed in their
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. It is resulting in
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young people’s health and future
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.
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, Sometimes
celebrities
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introducing the latest fashions and products and promoting trends that may be affected by youth and society.
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, some
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promote alcohol and fast food but they are not consuming them in real
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.
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, sometimes they promoting costly fashions and gadgets and it is affecting young people and they may be forced their parents to buy these products. In conclusion, I would like to say youngster should not follow them because of it, they are not concreting their
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aim, feeling unhealthy and destroyed their whole
life
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.
Submitted by Arun Saini on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media personalities
  • sports icons
  • role models
  • admiration
  • influence
  • behavior
  • mindset
  • values
  • unethical behavior
  • healthy lifestyles
  • social media platforms
  • celebrity culture
  • career aspirations
  • educational goals
  • positive change
  • ethical standards
  • amplify
  • idolize
  • public perception
  • impressionable
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