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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person

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Dear Sir, Hope
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 the person who is helping the community continuously to make it better. As I know, the majority of individuals are working hard for the betterment of
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society but I think Mr. Singh deserves much better for the award. He is the one who encouraged everyone to do something for the nation. Mr. Singh worked for the non-profit organization. And recently, he did an event in a school where he inspired children and youth to help
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poor individuals and make our surroundings cleaner.
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, he planted 20 trees in a row on the road to make the surroundings greener than ever. I would suggest you
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give the " best personality" award
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 person and make him the headlight of your newspaper by providing genuine information about his work. I think it would be a great gift for him. I would be grateful for you. Hope to hear back from you soon! Yours faithfully, Rex.
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task achievement
To achieve a higher score, consider including more specific details about Mr. Singh's activities and impact on the community.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs are fully developed. Adding a brief introduction about why the award is significant could enhance the structure.
task achievement
The letter clearly identifies a deserving individual and briefly describes his contributions.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a formal and respectful tone throughout, suitable for a letter to a newspaper editor.
greeting and closing
The use of a closing statement is clear and appropriate, rounding off the letter nicely.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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