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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women? What is your opinion?

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 competitive world, everyone desires to do any
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 to get a good life. It is commonly believed by many that genders are equal and girls can do any
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 which they want,
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, some of them feels that boys and girls are not equal and so the
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 are. In my opinion, I believe that
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 totally depends upon the
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 to the
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 which will be discussed in the course of
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 essay. One of the major reasons why both men and
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 are equal is owing to the fact of mental capabilities which shows the fact that where brainpower comes any gender can do any
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. In
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 factor, people need to show mental strength to complete the
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 on time.
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 restaurant both genders can work side by side like cooking where they need to show how quick they are. On other hand, there are certain
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 which are not suitable for
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 i.e physical strength base work. There are
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 where they need people who have enough strength to take things from one place to another without any damaging them.
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, at a construction ,site there are
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 that can only be performed by men because of the strong base and if a woman will try to do that they will get hurt or there can be an injury which will cause them to suffer. To conclude, undoubtedly, there are some
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 where men and
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 are equals where girls can do any type of
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,
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,
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 factor can not get deny that there are
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 which are not suitable for
women
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 especially where a physical part is required.
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