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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

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The dignity of the state is commonly considered to have more relationship with
space
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 discovery rather than the contribution of nations' collaboration. In my opinion, the industry of achieving galaxies is chiefly dedicated to
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 of the common goals
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 helps to unlock abilities for the purpose of implementing set tasks with the assistance of other countries.
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, the continuous education and technologies will trigger
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 of
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 investigation over the years,
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 it will not stay in one place and always be relevant to
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 of contemporary life.
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 and foremost, there are
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hundreds of research-based organizations which contain lots of countries with strong welfare and even emerging ones that are interrelated and cohesive. So,
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 web not only connects them with science
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 but keeps them economically linked.
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,
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 Studies Institute has signed
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contracts with approximately 25 states that are attributing to the fact that they can work collectively, it is very helpful
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 because it would be profitably for mitigating the expense in the way of
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 research if the nations were tied each other.
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, another thing is
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 growth of the knowledge domain. In the framework of recent changes, the vision of the people has upgraded and it is predicted that
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 will remain the steadiness after many years. Citizens became more literate and gregarious when the conversation between them comes to
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. Even by not being proficient in the field of exploration of
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,
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 has a magnificent opportunity to learn it. So,
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 chain
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 caused by the compatibility of the nations' diligence makes
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to
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be interested in
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 and enhance
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brain connectivity. If it stays the same, people will much more
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 in their fields in the future. In conclusion, being in
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a collective
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 with
another governments
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another government
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 in the sense of investigation of
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 plays a vital role in the founding the community and
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 well-being.
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