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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting is very important for people. Why might this be the case? DO YOU THINK THIS IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE SITUATION?

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It is believed in some
countries
 that owing a
house
 is more significant for humans than renting
one
. In my point of view,
i
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 think that both cases have their own advantages.
Firstly
, it is often argued in some
countries
 that they prefer
owing
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owning
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than
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 renting.
One
 of the major reasons can be that
can be that
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it gives a wide opportunity to the person who buys a new home to decide the
house
's view, by choosing the
colors
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 of wall paintings, the furniture, decorations, and other
house
 stuff.
This
 means that people could benefit from
this
 situation to use their imagination. Another reason can be that people do not have to pay for their
house
 each month, in which they pay only once for buying the
house
.
For instance
, a recent study showed that over half
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 of human being started to save money after purchasing
home
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.
Secondly
, in spite of owning positive factors,
however
, there are certainly important benefits from renting
home
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 as well.
One
such
 advantage is that the individual
do
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 not have to renovate or maintain the
house
everytime
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. The
second
 positive aspect is that
sometime
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 the main owner who is responsible for the rented
house
 can pay the bills on the renter's behalf. A particularly good example here is that in
few
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countries
 a person who rents a flat can use unlimited amounts of light, electricity, and water without confusion about bills. To sum up, while some
countries
 tend towards the
view point
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 of the importance of owning
house
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 rather than renting
one
,
i
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 would have to support the idea that both situations are positive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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