Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
world
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,world
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every country has poor
people
which leads to
the
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apply
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world
poverty
. According to
me
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my
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,the word
poverty
comes from
the
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unemployment ,
lack
of
education
and
population
. So here
i
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just explain with some instances and according to my own
opoinion
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opinion
opinions
.
First
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The first
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and foremost reason
of
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for
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poverty
is unemployment . There is
lack
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a lack
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of
jobs
is countries. If
people
don'
t
have
jobs
where they work and from where they get money to
fulfill
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fulfil
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their needs. They don'
t
have shelter , food to survive which is very important for human to survive .
For example
, in small
villages
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,villages
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there is
lot
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a lot
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of
peolple
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people
but they don'
t
have any house to live
and
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in and
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no money for food . And there is no rules and regulations in towns to help needy
people
no
govermental
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governmental
help for them .
Secondly
,
education
is play
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plays
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a pivotal role in everyone's life because with
education
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the education
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they find good
jobs
and they get paid good money and
fulfill
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fulfil
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their needs and dreams as well.
For instance
, if they have a good qualification they have good positions like teachers,doctors and officers . They
also
help some needy
people
which improve the
poverty
line . At the same
time
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,time
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one other factor is
population
.
Population
increase day by day which
cause
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causes
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many problems to exemplify is
povery
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poverty
. there is
lack
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a lack
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of
education
they don'
t
have any family plannings. which cause unwanted pregnancy . With
increase
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the increase
an increase
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of
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in
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population
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the population
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lack
of
jobs
,
vacancys
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vacancies
vacancy
. At
last
,
i
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I
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just wanna say that we need to care about all
that
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those
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things which explain in my above passages with different examples
this
will be
hepful
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helpful
to us to reduce the
poverty
.
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