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MORE PEOPLE TODAY ARE OVERWEIGHT THAN EVER BEFORE. WHAT ARE THE PRIMARY CAUSES OF THIS? WHAT MEASURES CAN BE TAKEN TO OVERCOME THIS EPIDEMIC.

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Today
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's world is far more advanced
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 the past one,in all kind of thing like: science ,
technology
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, sport etc.
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 the effects of the
technology
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 is seen on human population
today
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, as more and more people
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 are overweight than before and all of
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 is because of
technology
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 on which we are now mostly depend on. To overcome
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 epidemic we have to take some step like making awareness, the diseases which can cause by overweight. Overweight is the major concern as more people
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 are overweight than ever before, and because of
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 pupils is getting lot of health issue.
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: Heart problem, hypertension, diabetes, etc. All of
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 is because todays generation is mostly depend on
technology
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 for there
work
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 ,compares to the old generation and eat lot of junk
food
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 like burger, pizza, etc compares to homemade
food
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 because of busy schedule of there life.
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 now population don't do that much of physical
work
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 as our grandparents used to do. In my view the main cause of the overweight in todays crowd is
technology
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, laziness of doing the physical
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 and junk
food
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 which is unhealthy and unhygienic and contains more fat
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 the organic
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. For controlling
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 epidemic we can make the awareness of the disease which is caused by the overweight by the mean of advertisements, council information of overweight, encouraging for doing lot of physical
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 rather than sitting at home, avoiding fast
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, etc. In, conclusion overweight is major concern for todays people and necessary step has to been taken to prevent it,like: advertisement, awareness of diseases cause by overweight,etc.
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