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LOGGING OF THE RAINFOREST IS A SERIOUS PROBLEM AND MAY LEAD TO THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL LIFE AND HUMAN LIFE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

#rainforest #extinction #life
There are a lot of factors affecting rainforest.
However
, multiple factors like human and natural have
adverse
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 effect on tropical forest. It is agreed that logging may lead to the extinction of animal
life
 and human
life
. Analysing that it leads to
high
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 risk of contagious
diseases
 in human from animals; as well as,
loss
 of habitat will prove
this
.
Firstly
, a lot of transmissible
diseases
 are contracted by persons from animals
as a result
 of logging of the rain forest.
For instance
, in Africa, apes and other creatures are hunted for
bush meat
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 to be sold are vulnerable to
diseases
. Sadly, vulnerable
diseases
 from these animals will be contracted by individuals if logging of the tropical forests continues.
Thus
,
this
 makes it clear that
deforestation
 brings about the
loss
 of animal and person existence.
Secondly
, continuous
deforestation
 may cause critical habitat
disappear
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 from the planet.
For example
, the trees of the forest provide shelter for some species. Unfortunately, logging of the rainforest destroys natural surroundings;
there by
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, making it difficult for creatures to live.
As a result
,
deforestation
 may result in the
loss
 of
natural
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the natural
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 environment. In conclusion, greater risk of transmissible ailment from animal to
a
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person;
likewise
, the
loss
 of habitat may be caused by
deforestation
.
This
 shows that desertification may cause the disappearance of animal and soul existence.
Finally
, it is predicted that logging is a serious problem and may lead to the extinction of animal
life
 and human
life
.
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