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In many countries, people would rather rent a house instead of buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of both.

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It is known, that every human being needs a roof above their heads. It would be extremely difficult to live only in hotels throughout the whole life.
That is
 why people decide to
rent
 or buy a
house
.
However
, there are places where the majority prefers renting. Both options have
its
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their
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 pros and cons. For starters, buying a
house
 enquires a lot of money. Those who earn a minimum salary are bearly able to cover needed payments, not to mention save for their own accommodation.
Therefore
,
rent
 is the only possible option for them.
Moreover
, even for those who earn more, buying a
house
 could be difficult to handle.
Consequently
, most of society takes a loan for
this
 cause, which is required to pay back.
However
, the largest advantage of
this
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in
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is
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a
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the
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 fact, that one has the awareness, that
this
 place is only theirs. That leads to the point, where renting a
house
 seems pointless. Despite the fact, that taking a loan is not necessary, there is still a force of paying a monthly bill. Loan repayment makes them closer to owning their own
house
,
rent
however
, only allows them to stay in
some place
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someplace
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.
Moreover
, in most situations, they are not allowed to make changes in the apartment.
However
, the possibility of renting is great for travellers, students and those not certain of their perfect place of living. It is not
pernamently
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permanently
 and allows
to
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us to
them to
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 try many options out. Giving all that, I believe that both options are significant and will find it's followers.
However
, from my personal
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observation
observations
observetion
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,observetion
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 I can say that mostly wealthy people and older
one
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ones
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 decide to buy a
house
.
Young
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The young
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 generation in highly-developed countries, with
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
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 of
travelling
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,travelling
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 would definitely prefer to
rent
.
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