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Biological warfare is the use of infectious agents with the intent to kill humans as an act of war. Some People believe that this type of warfare should be legally regularized by the UN. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Biological weapons are commonly used in
this
 modern world to kill men as other traditional weapons were used in the war. Some would argue that
UN
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 organization ought to
control
this
 kind of battle hastily. I completely agree with
this
 notion because it may kill
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humans indiscriminately in a country and
also
 severely affects
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underdeveloped nations. The main plausible reason why the UN must
control
 biological warfare is that it not only hits the enemy but
also
 targets
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innocent citizens in a country. As an effect, most
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people
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the people
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 who
are not even involve
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 in a battle will lose their lives. They even have no information and are engaged in their work.
For example
,
Pakistan
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the Pakistan
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 government has used
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a virus
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 to kill the militants in
southern
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the southern
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 part of the country;
however
, the consequences
was
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 not limited to
this
 part but
also
 spread to the northern region and targeted
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innocent
people
. The
second
 viable reason is the impact of biological war
to
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the
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underdeveloped
countries
although
 these nations are not in the race to the developed
countries
. Biological species can reach them through the state-of-the-art mode of transport.
People
 move from one corner of the world to the other corner. The underdeveloped world
have
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 not ample resources to
control
this
 lethal species. As an example, in the recent outbreak of
COVID-19
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 virus, the undeveloped
countries
,
such
 as western Africa could not fight against
this
 deleterious virus due to their impoverished economy. In conclusion, UN organization must legally
control
 the biological war owing to its indiscriminately impact on
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innocent
people
 and effect on the undeveloped
countries
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