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More and more plastic waste has polluted cities, countryside’s, and oceans. What problems does it cause and what measures can be taken?

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Plastic
 refuse has contaminated towns, rural areas and marine wildlife. There are two main issues,
people
 are
carless
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careless
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 towards their environment and the limited information on the harmful effect
this
 could have. Possible solutions would be a government fine
people
 who throw rubbish in street and teach
people
 on the detrimental effects. One significant problem causing pollution is that
people
 do not pay attention to the surrounding, they think there are a plethora of workers who are employed to clean their cities. To illustrate
this
 point, half of
young
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people
 in Paris go out on a Friday night and have a great time with their friends and after partying they often throw away takeaway’s packages which made of
plastic
 in the street or rivers as they believe someone would clean after them.
This
 would not only pollute the place where they live but
also
 would affect animals’ wildlife. To tackle
this
 issue, governments should impose
fine
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a fine
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 on anyone who
disposes
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 any rubbish not in a dust bin, by doing
this
people
 could become responsible. Another problem that needs to be considered is the lack of awareness about the harm that
plastic
 waste can have on human’s health, climate change and marine inhabitants. In 2015 about a quarter of
sea
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 creatures of the Indian sea was found dead due to water contamination with particles of
plastic
, most
people
 do not have knowledge about the environmental consequences.
This
 problem could be mitigated by environmentalists providing the nations with information about the danger of waste on the planet earth, it may, in the long run, be advantages as
people
 could become conscious of the damage
of
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pollution can have. In conclusion, the high increase of
plastic
 waste has negatively impacted
on
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cities, landscapes and oceans because individuals do not have
sense
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a sense
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 of responsibilities to keep their cities clean and lack
of
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knowledge about the effects of
plastic
 pollution. The government needs to look at finning citizens who throw rubbish away and environmentalists need to educate
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society.
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