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Some people think that young children benefit from going to nursery school before starting primary school. Others think it is better for young children to stay all day with their families. Siscuss both views and give your opinion.

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A few people opine that
children
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, in their formative years, ought to attend kindergarten, whereas others believe that early childhood days should be spent with their families. I intend to discuss both views followed by my own opinion in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, those who favour the former notion assert that
nursery
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 schools can equip them with some fundamentals of the subjects which would be taught in their primary education.
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, learning the basics of mathematics
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 as counting and understanding the language characters help in grasping these subject quite easy in the higher classes, thereby giving them an edge over other students who do not get a chance to learn these fundamentals.
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, proponents of the latter view claim that spending
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 young ones with their guardians at home increases affection among them. To explain, kids do not have enough
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 to spend with their loved ones once they start their formal education.
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,
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 is the only
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 in their life to get close with their parents and family members.
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, in Canada, students are allowed to start school only after attaining the age of six.
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 step was taken by the government so that kids can strengthen their bond with the family at the initial stage. In my perspective, at
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 early age
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 can develop in a better way by not joining any type of
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 school. Since tender minds do not adhere to any kind of routine at
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 an initial stage, living at home with family can provide a stress-free environment. Apart from
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, it provides an ample amount of
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 for
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 to play with the family members, especially with their grandparents, who can even teach them some moral values from their vast experience of life. These aspects would be generally missed if kids are admitted to
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 schools at an initial stage.
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, the family plays a vital role in the development of
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's life. To conclude, even though
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 school can teach some basics of
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 education, I still assert that students should spend the initial years of their childhood at their home so that emotional attachment with the family can be developed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • early education
  • social skills
  • learning environment
  • structured curriculum
  • prepare for
  • interactive learning
  • emotional support
  • bonding
  • individualized attention
  • homely atmosphere
  • flexible schedule
  • cultural values
  • familial values
  • personal opinion
  • weigh the pros and cons
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