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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as the poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Shortage of skilled labour in developing
nations
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, caused by migration of
people
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 to developed
countries
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, has raised the opinion that rich
countries
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 should not employ skilled
workers
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 from poor
countries
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, as they are more required there. I agree with
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 view only to a certain extent because a nation does require trained professionals for growth, but we cannot undermine the right of a person to get a better work opportunity as well. As the world has become a global village, more and more
people
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 from developing
countries
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 are shifting to developed
nations
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 for better work opportunities and
lifestyle
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, resulting in a shortage of skilled
workers
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 in poor
countries
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. To illustrate, in India, most of the youth is preferring to immigrate to developed
nations
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 after completing their studies, rather than staying in their own country.
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 an acute shortage of trained professionals can clearly be seen in India.
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, the opinion that rich
countries
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 should not hire
workers
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 from developing
nations
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, feels somewhat right.
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, every person studies and works hard to get a better
lifestyle
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 and earn more money, and the rich
countries
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 offer much higher wages to trained professionals as compared to the poor
countries
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. So the migration of qualified
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 to rich
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 is quite justified.
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 to
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, there is a huge difference in the
lifestyle
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 of rich
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 as compared to the poor ones, and
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, there is nothing wrong with
people
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 going to work in rich
countries
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 seeking better and happy life and developed
nations
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 offering jobs to them. In conclusion, thinking about a nation, the view that jobs should not be offered to the skilled
workers
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 of developing
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 by the developed
countries
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 might feel right, but I am of the opinion that every individual deserves a better life and there is nothing wrong with rich
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 offering jobs, as they give them a chance to uplift their
lifestyle
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 and earn more
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