Teenagers who commit serious crimes, such as burglary or murder, should be treated in the same way as adults who commit crimes. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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A true justice system guarantees a balanced society with peace and protection for all its members. According to some
people
dealing with adolescent
crimes
differently have more advantages than treating them for their
crimes
in the same manner as adult criminals. Both viewpoints are discussed thoroughly before I share my own opinion at the end of the essay.
First
of all, according to a section of society, the advantages of handling teenage
crimes
separately have more benefits. These
people
are convinced that teen kids are not mature enough and they are easily brainwashed by bad company.
For example
, the USA has seen many firing cases in their academic institutes killing many
people
which were done by young students due to various reasons. Another argument in
this
regard is that if they are imprisoned along with
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lawbreakers these would become the same mature outlaws considering them as heroic characters of the society.
Therefore
, these should be given a chance to change their way of thinking
hence
not giving them sever legal punishments.
On the other hand
, criminals must be charged equally under the
law
independent of their age group. As an example, the teenagers involved in a mass shooting in Alabama School were sentenced purely as per the United States criminal act. By acting in
this
way,
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system sends a message to everyone that all are equal when it comes to
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in front of the
law
.
Hence
, to bring rule of
law
, peace and harmony among the
people
, it is most important that
law
offenders must be dealt
without
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any kind of discrimination as it will uphold the supremacy of
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system of the state.
Otherwise
, it can create unrest and chaos among the masses. Above mentioned analysis depicts that there should be no different legal procedure based on age.
Law
is equal for mature as well as juvenile criminals. Based on
this
I support the latter point of view,
that is
, that teenage who commits
crimes
must be given
same
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legal punishment as an adult criminal. Clearly advantages of
this
practice outweigh its disadvantages.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent effect
  • equality before the law
  • psychological development
  • rehabilitation prospects
  • incarcerating
  • hardened criminals
  • tailoring punitive measures
  • developmental aspects
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