Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

The huge increase in population in Brazil during the
last
decades contributes to the lack of public
schools
among underprivileged people.
This
essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
problem and suggest some possible solutions.
To begin
with,
this
issue is happening because the government has to decrease investments in the educational system each year. If you compare investments from 2000 with 2020, it's possible to see
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in Brazilian tuition. Simoustanly the number of students in all levels of academic degrees has been growing up and the necessity to invest in inputs
such
as books, teachers and, mainly, in technology, increases either.
For example
, in the state of São Paulo, the major economy of the country, there are 1 million underprivileged kids from 3 to 15 years old waiting for a place in a public school. It's an awful daily scenario which could be avoided if, ten years ago, there were a government strategy to increase the number of
schools
around the state seeing that the population was increasing indeed. In order to solve
this
problem, the government should invest a high amount of money in creating new establishments to receive
schools
or, at least, new vacancies on actual one´s. As an alternative, public organizations should create academic aids to propose vacancies in private
schools
to those
whom
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are deprived of financial condition.
As a result
, we probably would have an
increasy
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increase
in academic educational level in children and probably a better literacy for
this
generation. In conclusion, the population´s
raise
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is affecting educational standards for Brazilian children.
However
, the authorities could implement some strategies to boost investments and entry, mainly for impoverished individuals, to public
schools
.
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  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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