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Fresh water has always been a limited resources in some part of the world today, however, growing world wide demand had made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increase demand and what measures can government and individuals take to respond to this problem.

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Water
 is the basic constituent of human survival, but the rocketing
demands
 will exceed the limited amount of
water
 in the globe in the future. In the following essay, I will explain the reason for growing
demands
 and suggest some methods that citizens and societies can do to resolve problems caused. On the one hand, the basic cause of increasing needs is the rising population. In the present world, there are 7 billion people, which is already a huge demand.
However
,
this
 figure is still being larger. Apart from daily uses, there are
also
 growing derived
demands
. One apparent example can be seen from infants’ toys that require
water
 as a production factor. An increasing number of infants leads to rising demand for those toys, as well as the needs for freshwater.
Therefore
, the increment of the population is the elementary reason for consuming more
water
.
On the other hand
,
although
 the demand for
water
 rocket recently, there are two methods for the residents and governments to take.
Firstly
, people can save the usage of
water
 by not wasting it. In daily life, there are millions of tonnes of
water
 wasted per day by simply forgetting to turn off the tap.
This
 can be resolved by reminding everyone around the world to do so, which will decrease the rate of diminishing storage of
water
. The
second
 way is to recycle. As for all individuals, they can do
this
 by using distilled
water
 left in the pot to irrigate plants. When it comes to the government, it should subsidy recycling programmes and invest more in technology that can turn wastewater into a fresh one, which can increase the supply to encounter the rising
demands
. In conclusion,
although
 it is a global problem of rocketing needs of
freshwater
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, there are stills a variety of ways to deal with it. We should pay more attention to
this
 issue, and take actions immediately.
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