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You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend suggest when and where you could meet your friend next

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Dear Tara, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I reached my home safely. We had a great time in your new
house
. I can't tell how much I appreciate the beauty of your new
house
. Italian marbles in the hall
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 really grabbed my attention. I love that ancient Indian
sclupture
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sculpture
 you placed in the living room. It brought
rich
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 vintage look to the
house
. Of course, the entire design of the building is
marvelious
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marvellous
, but it is the living room
which
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that
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 I fell in love with. I want to say thanks for inviting me
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 because I loved staying in a
house
 near to
mountains
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the mountains
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.
Last
 week we spent a night in the
back yard
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backyard
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 with
camp fire
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 and I never forget the music Jack played with his guitar. I found the advantage of having
such
 a big backyard and I like your idea
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 that for your archery training.
Next
 month we have a long weekend, so I am
planing
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 our catch up at my home
this
 time. Come to my
house
 on 25th
next
 month. I am inviting Jack as well. It will be a great time again. Looking forward to seeing you. Regards Dheeraj
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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