Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some
people
argue that technology has raised the gap between the wealthy and the poor
people
, while others
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believe (spelling)
that is
decreasing the gap between them. The
widevariety
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wide variety
of technological advancements is reshaping our lives and there are strengths and weaknesses with
of
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both ideas. Certain inventions and developments have an important role in filling the gap between
peopleof
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people of
different income levels. Some technologies are accessible to all
people
due to their availability at
cheap
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rate. The Internet,
for example
, is affordable to almost all sections of
societyand
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society and
society
certain places
such
as airports, bus stations and restaurants have Wifi wi-fi spots option where the Internet is freely available.
Furthermore
, modern technologies have provided more opportunities for everyone to improve their incomes and to develop different types of
businessesregardless
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businesses regardless
of financial status. With mobile applications like
Uber
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anyone can join
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whether they have a car or not. (whether is like ‘if’) Despite the positive impacts, technology can
also
have many disadvantages. A large
numberof
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number of
manufacturing companies are gradually shifting from hiring human
labor
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to machines for
different
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production
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of different items. Rapid advances in robotics and artificial intelligence had led to a decline in
people
's work hours decline.
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A factory in China has replaced 90% of its human workers with robots.- the idea is good but it should be more developed, the example is only one sentence. Can you think of developing it more?
Moreover
, advanced treatments and medicines have been developed to cure deadly diseases but their cost is
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too expensive and inaccessible for the poor
people
(or: for the poor).
For instance
,
people
dye die if they suffer from chronic illnesses
such
as asthma or cancer without receiving medical care because it is
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too expensive. To sum up, I strongly believe that the
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is lies somewhere in the middle in-between and it depends on which
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point of view are we looking
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should be impersonalized as much as possible) considered when thinking about
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the advancement in technology.
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