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Is it necessary for parents to attend parenting courses to bring their children up.Do you agree of disagree with the statement?

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 most important responsibilities is perhaps taking good care of their offsprings. It is believed that it should be compulsory for all mums and dads to take parenting courses so that they are better prepared for parenthood. While I accept that
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 are beneficial, I do not agree that they should be mandatory. On the one hand, the father and mother would benefit a great deal from parenting
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 series provide mothers and fathers with in-depth knowledge about how to raise a kid at different developmental stages.
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 who decide to take the parenting program will have a better understanding of their children’s needs;
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, they can take the best care of them.
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, mums and dads in parenting
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 are equipped with basic medical training to deal with emergency situations more effectively.
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 aid training teaches
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 what to do if their child has a high fever or a breathing issue. Despite
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 benefits of taking part in parenting series or workshops, I believe that they should not be compulsory.
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 is because many
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, especially those who struggle financially, have to work overtime, in the evenings or even at weekends, just to make ends meet. Forcing them to attend those
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 would adversely affect their work and their lives.
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, I think that
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 should be free to decide whether or not they want to participate in those courses
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 of being forced to do so. In conclusion, in spite of some benefits that parenting
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 offer, I believe that they should be optional rather than compulsory.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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