Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
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this
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days, already all the
people
visit
to
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other
countries
for
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to
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enjoy
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. Some
people
think that
this
trip
affect
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to
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countries
badly. I believe that
travelling
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any country for any
people
would provide great returns for
people
. I will elaborate
my
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opinion in
the
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further
paragraphs. In the world, there
are
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a lot of county and nations and I believe that to be able
contact
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for
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these nations is a considerable thing. Being a qualified human requires some properties and seeing new
countries
and cultures is one of these requirements. A person who has experienced many
journey
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journeys
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to other
countries
would have more advantageous than others in terms of different things.
For example
,in 2018 I had
traveled
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to Ireland for two months and I claim that
this
journey changed my perspective
for
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many aspects. I cannot see any
obstucle
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obstacle
obstacles
for that unless there is a bad intention. On the other hands, in the
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humanity faces many dangers like diseases,
terorism
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terrorism
etc.Travelling to other
countries
should have
unwanted
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an unwanted
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influence on the
countries
in these dangerous conditions.
For instance
,in
the
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early
2020
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the world has encountered the
dadly
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deadly
virus called Covid that caused many ramifications for all the world. It is
inevatible
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inevitable
to have undesirable consequences in
this
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these
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cirtumstances
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circumstances
circumstance
. In conclusion, unless there are extraordinary bad conditions visiting other
countries
would not have
negative
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a negative
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impact on the
countries
.
On the contrary
, I
belive
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believe
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that it is very beneficial for each
members
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member
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of the
countries
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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