IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what way has technology affected the types of relationship people make. Has this become a positive or negative development?

#people #technology #relationship #become #development
Advancements in technology have brought significant changes in all spheres of our lives. Undoubtedly, it has altered the ways of our interpersonal and official communication as well. These changes in our interactions with others are largely appreciated and accepted in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society.
First
, methods of correspondence in our work life are completely different
than
Change the preposition
from
show examples
 those used to be
couple
Change the article
a couple
show examples
 of decades before. Old mailing system, typewriters and fax machines have been replaced by emails, computers, and
smart phones
Correct your spelling
smartphones
show examples
. Distances have become irrelevant and people can meet their juniors and superiors by using Zoom meetings. The MS Teams is another example of
modern-day
Add an article
a modern-day
show examples
 tool for free calls, conferences and sharing official data without the need of posting these via mail. Now it is quite possible to work away from your office or business due to these smart gadgets and tools and you do not have to be physically present
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 these places if
situation
Add an article
the situation
show examples
requires
Correct pronoun usage
yourequires
show examples
.
Secondly
, technology has brought families and relatives closer to each other than ever before. A person working abroad can easily chat with his family daily without any hassle of travelling every two or three months. Friends can do gossip for hours and hours without moving out of their homes.
Similarly
, teachers and students can exchange subject materials and ideas on any topic while staying at home due to
current
Correct article usage
the current
show examples
 pandemic situation.
For instance
, Facebook and WhatsApp not only have made it easier to share materials, data and posts on large scale but
also
 video calls by these apps have revolutionized the old way of telecommunication. In conclusion, technology has absolutely affected our ways of communication by reducing the cost and time which normally used to deter us from
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
effective communication.
Therefore
, I personally believe that it is a positive change as it has created
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
flexibility in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society.
Submitted by Javed Iqbal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: