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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Culture
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 is a complex term, formed by different patterns. The issue becomes even more complex when we tend to define someone’s
culture
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. Many believe it is a result of the
country
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 of
origin
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,
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, there is a strong argument that
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 is only a minor influence, with which I agree, as I tend to believe someone’s
culture
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 is a combination of their environment where they grew up in and their family’s
origin
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This
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 essay aims to discuss both sides, and why do agree more with the
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 claim. Your parent’s
origin
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 indicates the most important cultural pattern, mostly through the
language
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. Due to the communication ability, we can form words and understand the world and our history based on the
language
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 we speak.
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, many traditions are related to
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language
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.
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,
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 is partially true for the
people
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 that were born and raised in another
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.
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, for many
people
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, their upbringing and the environment of the upbringing might be prevailing. Today, due to globalization many
people
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 are born and raised in another
country
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. Albeit for many
people
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,
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 might add additional value in their life as they learn a new
language
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 through socializing, and eventually get fully assimilated into the
culture
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 of the hosting
country
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, for many
people
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 might be a challenge as they cannot culturally identify with neither of identities. Overall, cultural identity is a combination of many factors and can be challenging. As much as your
origin
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 plays an important role in shaping your cultural identity, subconsciously we all adapt certain cultural patterns to the environment we were put in.
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