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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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In most of the private companies, people have a mentality of working for long
hours
 or in some cases they will stay in office for a
longer
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 time just
for
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to
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 show off purpose. According to
me
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my
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,
this
 situation has more cons than pros. I will throw more light on
this
 perspective below. It has been observed in many IT companies that employees stretch their working
hours
 and spend very less time with their families. Most people believe that working late
hours
 will create a good impression on their boss and they may get promotions early compared to their fellow colleagues. Extending the working
hours
 on a regular basis may lead to serious health consequences.
This
also
 kills a relaxing time which one can spend with their family and friends.
This
 situation destroys work-life balance and because of
this
 people start facing issues in their personal life. Today management
also
 prefers smart work rather than working hard. So,
instead
 of creating a good impression employees will be suffering rather bad consequences in both personal and professional space.
However
, working for long
hours
 is considered good in
few
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 cases.
For example
, when there is an implementation for some project and a bug has been identified and needs an urgent fix at that moment itself. In
this
 case, if a person extends his support and solves the problem,
this
 creates a very good impression on customers or senior management and there are chances of receiving a bonus. So, to conclude, working for long
hours
 should be avoided unless it is very urgent as it can cause serious health issues and can lead to problems in personal space too.
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