Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of education and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give you opinion and examples from your own experience.

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Art is an essential part of education,it will help to develop the creative thinking of each
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mind.I completely agree that extracurricular activities must be a part of academics.
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will discuss the advantages of extracurricular activities in
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scholars
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modern academic system
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are overstressed with studies and they are competing not with their neighbourhood
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they are competing in
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village.In
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educational system
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kids
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need some relaxation
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,it can help to find out the hidden talents
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from
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they would have multiple capabilities because every kid is not active in academics some
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would be more interested in
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sports,music and
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as acting,dancing and drama.
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some schools are conducting cultural programmes every academic year.Teachers are finding the talents in children and they are making them
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develop their activities.
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the
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confidence level will improve to perform in front of
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as well as they can do the best in
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,various types of
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arts
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performances will lead the children to become famous celebrities in
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the famous Indian actor Amitab Bachan,
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become encouraged by his teachers in his
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study oriented
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kid when he was in primary
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.One day his class teacher conducted a small drama in his class
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.The little Bachan has been
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incredible performance.Later
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he started t perform in every
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dramas,gradually he started to act in public dramas.At
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he is a
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actor in the world.
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he motivated many youngsters through his films with his stainless
perforamances
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performances
performance
in Indian movies.Not only one person created the history but
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there are many
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people become started
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carriers from the
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level. To summarise,there are uncountable advantages
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be seen from
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and
musics
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music
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the
arts
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should be an academic subject from the primary class onwards.It will help abundantly to our future generation.Every
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has
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to appreciatable
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art is a divine process and the artists are blessed by almighty.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Curricula
  • Foster creativity
  • Emotional development
  • Cultural awareness
  • Global citizenship
  • Historical perspectives
  • Enhance academic performance
  • Communication
  • Employability
  • Soft skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Mental health
  • Stress reduction
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Diverse cultures
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Self-expression
  • Holistic education
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