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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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These days, there is an ongoing debate between
people
 about the
culture
 of the person influenced by the county of origin. While other
people
 claim that it does not have
major
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 impact
of
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origin
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the origin
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 of
Country
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the Country
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, as per my view both the arguments have validity and I shall explain my point of view by analysing both sides of the argument. The main reason which impacts
the
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human mostly is the place where they were born and raised. The lifestyle is mostly biased by the native
culture
for example
 food, the spices are the important ingredient of Indian cuisine. It should
also
 be taken into account that traditional music, folk dance are mostly enjoyed by the
people
, which come from their country of origin. On the other side, we should consider the effect of Globalisation. Many
people
 travel around the world for
business
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a business
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, job or for the interest which
provide
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 exposure to different cultures. In
this
 situation, humans look forward and adapt to the surroundings of the place which bring a change in the
behavior
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 or way of life,
for
instance
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people
 who have migrated to other countries
they
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like the music or clothing of that region. While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, my personal opinion is that
people
 change their way of living as per the place and start adapting to a new
culture
. I would strongly say that everyone has the liberty to enjoy life as they wish and there is no much impact
of
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 where they came from. All together humans are social animals and have all rights to follow any
culture
 which suits
him
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them
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