Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #events #waste #money #celebrations #role #lives #individuals #society

It is undeniable fact that in

this

modern-era keeping feast at the various social occasion is arranged to bring relatives or friends together.

Although

this

ceremony causes momentary pleasure in all party familiar persons, immense money is wasted in

this

celebration. In the upcoming essay, I discuss both views and

finally

reach the conclusion.

Firstly

, how these celebrations play a crucial role in individual lives.

For instance

, one parent arranges a small party and invite all the relatives to feast on their son’s 10th birthday in his hometown after staying up late abroad. No doubt all their friends and relatives will rejuvenate after

this

party, give blessing to

this

lovely family for their success.

Similarly

, celebrations at various occasions for a different social affair can cause tremendous happiness in known community members and resultantly plays a very vital role in public which is discussed henceforth with talking about effects of it on other surrounding persons.

Secondly

, what effects will occur on

this

occasion celebration

Change the punctuation

show examples

The celebration is never completed without eating, music, decoration and many more. All the respective persons of various trades have been benefited from

this

social gathering which can cause contentment in them as well.

Hence

, as mentioned in the opening lines of the subject no one can deny that there is a waste of money; but it is only the family who arranging

this

ceremony remaining community get enormous advantages.

Finally

, to sum up I opine that occasional social ceremony should be arranged.

Although

enormous money has been spent on these things, it is helpful to

the

Remove the article

apply

show examples

social well-being as well as benefit poor people.

However

, how much spending on these matters is depending on the individual’s financial capacity. So, it must be arranged wisely.

Submitted by HEMAL PATEL on Tue Mar 09 2021

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

289 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

lavish parties
essential expenditures
financial stress
lasting memories
social bonds
emotional support
familial and social ties
mental health
community cohesion
cultural heritage
sense of identity
traditional practices
sense of belonging
continuity
unique cultural aspects
personal well-being
routine
life satisfaction
reasonable budget
cost-effective
potluck parties

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
In poor families, teenagers may have to work part-time as well as study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this for these teenagers.
There is a strong argument that young people from poor families should study and work part-time to cater to their financial needs. In this essay, I will examine from both sides the benefits and drawbacks of the statement.
6.5
band
Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
The rapid advancement of technology changes how our society works. Besides, easy access to technology and the internet shifted our daily habits and behaviour. This includes children's behaviour related to the usage of gadgets. Not only this phenomenon might help children to grow, but also it might hinder children's development.
6
band
Some people prefer to live in house, while others fee that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
To fulfill residential needs, there is a popular discussion about living in a landed house or living on a high-rise building. I agree that living in a landed house would provide more advantages than living in a high-rise building for several reasons.
6.5
band
Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is worldwide debated whether computers were the most significant innovation of the previous century. The writer of this essay no doubt advocates this statement as computers play a decisive role in our lives and they laid the foundations for future enhancement of technology, and standard of living.
4.5
band
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
The disputes about choosing specific subject or exploring other subjects have been becoming a topic of discussion in the education field, particularly in the University. Some students want to specialized with the main subject only, and some are excited to explore by dedicating their time and focus to another courses.

Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In poor families, teenagers may have to work part-time as well as study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this for these teenagers.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people prefer to live in house, while others fee that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion