There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope
this
letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
letter with regard to draw your attention towards unreliability in bus services over the past two weeks. I am Dinesh from sector H. I live just near to sector H bus stop. I am an advocate by profession. I rely on the local bus service to commute to court.
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the past two weeks, there
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an issue with route number 21. It
is suppose
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to arrive at 10:00 AM but
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case
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the past two weeks. Because of
this
, I am not able to reach the court premises on time.
Also
, I am missing the important hearings. I do not have any other options to avail. Could you please consider taking appropriate steps to ensure the correct timings
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followed
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Especially,
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route number 21 which is
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unreliable. Please let me know if you require any
further
information. Yours faithfully, Dinesh
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Consider including more specific details about the problems with the bus service to offer a more comprehensive understanding.
coherence cohesion
Use varied sentence structures to improve readability and engagement of the letter.
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The letter clearly describes the problems being faced with the bus service.
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The tone of the writing is polite and appropriately addresses the manager.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting, main body, and closing.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph deals with a distinct idea, aiding in overall clarity and organization.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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