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Some people think cheap air travel brings us benefits while others believe that non-essential flights should be cut in order to reduce environmental problems caused by cheap air travel. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some believe that less costly
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 give
people
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 advantages, while others are of the opinion that those flight should be removed that are not indispensable to save the environment. While cheap
flights
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 allow
people
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 to go to different nations for their leisure activities, they exhaust too much Carbon Dioxide in the atmosphere.
One
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 the
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 hand, more and more
people
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 are travelling to different places around the world to spend their holidays due to the
air
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travel
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companies
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 that charge less than other
companies
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.
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 is to say that before the arrival of the
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people
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 could not afford to
travel
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 as frequently as they are doing these days because of the discount they get and many
companies
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 allow
people
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 to take their infants with them for free.
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, since the arrival of Malaysian
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, which
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 of the cheapest
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companies
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 in South Asia, the number of
people
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 who visit India from Malaysia just got doubled.
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, I believe too many
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 in the
air
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 causing a plethora of environmental issues.
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 the other hand, the overall environment of the world is being affected by CO2 which is being released in a large amount by aeroplanes.
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 is because cheap
flights
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 allow more
people
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 to
travel
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 to different countries for their recreational activities so the more
people
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 will
travel
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 the more
flights
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 are in the
air
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 releasing greenhouse gas.
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, less temperature was recorded in many countries during
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 summer in 2020 because
flights
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 were banned due to the Covid-19. In conclusion, some would argue that less costly
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 give us an option to have a vacation in our favourite countries, I believe environmental problems are more important because they are posing serious threats to the entire world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • carbon footprint
  • carbon emissions
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • environmental impact
  • global connectivity
  • noise pollution
  • overtourism
  • sustainable tourism
  • sustainable aviation fuels
  • carbon offsetting
  • aviation industry
  • climate change
  • eco-friendly
  • responsible policies
  • public awareness
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