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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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In today’s world, the number of unemployed
people
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 is ever increasing. Even in some developed ,
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 problem needs a real solution.
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, it is the best idea that all students before their steps for adult life should take an additional
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year
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. Analyzing many sides of
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 problem I decided to report that
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 is a good idea which completely helps the young generation for their future thanks to learning
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 management and pay attention to self-improvement.
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,
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 always need to think for themselves.
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 is evidenced by, in our country when students in their
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 11th years always hurry up to admit for any unrated universities.
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, they regret why they didn’t think deeply at that
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.
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.
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, it must be concluded that the government ought to add a
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year
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 to the system of studying.
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 to
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, not all
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 able to ameliorate their spiritual and technological knowledge while school
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.
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, when
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 go to travel or work in any environment, only their own things which show the only strikingly true way and mind keeps them alive as well as in pure intelligence. When looking at
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 example, it is obvious that every man has to not lose himself. To sum up, a
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year
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 will totally help
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, who cannot find themselves. To summarize, as seen above, the country has to pay attention to a
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year
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 and look closer to
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 offer. It is for these reasons I feel a
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year
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 is a big opportunity for our future. It is my hope that after 10 years all schools will put up a
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year
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 and abate unhappy
people
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’s counts.
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